I'm in some dark place here,
don't know where to go....
I can see you,
but only so faint
...
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This poem builds up a lot of dramatic tension prior to the conclusion. I think the final sentence 'all you do is stare at a photo of me...' would be more emphatic if it was not broken up into 6 seperate lines. but rather into 2. all you do is stare at a photo of me. Very good effot.
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