Thursday, December 1, 2011

I'M Gonna Leave This World.. Comments

Rating: 4.8

To-day I need a lurking place;
Can I thirst with my eyes peace?
All the hope gifted me pain,
All the dream lost in vain,
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VIPINS PUTHOORAN
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Walterrean Salley 07 December 2011

Life, which is good, consists of pleasure and, unfortunately, pain. Such pain is sometimes overwhelming; we simply long to escape it all.

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Unwritten Soul 03 December 2011

Hey Vipins, wake up...are you got bad day dreaming again...where are you going if you decide to leave this world? ? wanna go space outside, well think twice, no oxygen for you there my dear friend hahaha...Joking, what's wrong Vipins, come on tell me what is bothering your mind...'pool of blood', hey better we donate to hospital hahaha...world is able to bend in many shape as you want if you try to change..dont let sad taking over your soul..i know what you can do..BIG SMILE, sure not bitter like pills..yuck! ! ! come one Vipins, wake up, stand strong and still in this world, space outside dont have good curry you know, Only india got it :) Cheer some_Unwritten Soul

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Sajna Kailas 03 December 2011

ohhhhhhhh very sad poem! shows the great grief inside!

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Louis Cecile 03 December 2011

Good strong piece of writing. Some of the language almost resembles Christian prayer. Good sense of flow as if wallow in the struggles of life.

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Paul Colvin 02 December 2011

Death is something I have experienced a lot of this year and have written on it too. Very well written Vipins, very emotional.

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Kevin Patrick 02 December 2011

Depressing but thats the subject matter, the language is rich and filled with amzing texture fantastic write, don't leave this world becasue I want you to write more. Regards

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Kaia Grønnbæck 02 December 2011

Dark. Very dark. And passionate. This line: As I am now drowning in the struggles-sea, I need a freedom from this life. especially caught my attention. You are a skilled writer!

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Crimson Love 01 December 2011

'Amidst all the shadows of hate were rife. I'm gonna see a pool of blood; I'm gonna leave this world. ' Beautiful lines, truly a phenomenal write.

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Dave Walker 01 December 2011

A very sad poem, a beautiful poem. Sometimes our demons seem to take over, They fill our minds with thoughts that are not really ours. We have to fight them, and when we win, we are a much better person for it. The demons can never win. We are born to beat them. It is our destiny to beat them, to help others in poems. A good poem my friend.

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Dead Leaf 01 December 2011

Why this sad poem? ? ? ? ?

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Jacqui Broad 01 December 2011

As a spirit in the sky, who is going to leave us beautiful poems, hmm? One day your day will come, my friend, but don't decide to let it be soon. Even I who have reason to want to die, don't even think of ending the Higher One's purpose for me. In times of trouble, He test our value, and won't put any obstacle in our way He didn't think we'd be able to overcome. So, lift your chin, dear friend, and don't leave before your time...

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