Wednesday, April 15, 2009

I'M Dying Comments

Rating: 5.0

Laying on the sidewalk,
I can feel my heart beating against the cement.
I can feel the ant crawling on my arms,
it would be useless to brush them off.
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Aylissa Ramirez
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Harley Roth 06 May 2009

Wow i was feeling bad for the kid in the begining, very nice twist on the end. Good imigry

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Angel Uchiyama 17 April 2009

Great unexpected poem. I loved the way you broke the tory at the end. I't so deep and dramatic then it's funny and usual.

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Megan Collins 17 April 2009

Ha! Wow I laughed pretty hard when I got to the end of this poem. This pome shows alot of your personality too haha..funny funny

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