I'M Done With Life! Comments

Jennifer: A sad poem with a spark. What is the spark? You said it when you wrote: Did I make a big enough impact? Therein is the key to your happiness. You must make the impact. Don’t bother with begging others to love you, to care about you. You be the one to care about others. Make that impact and you will find that you won’t have to ask others to care for you. They will. May I point out that you really wanted to start the poem with: ‘You are’ and shorten it to, ‘You’re’ and again in the fourth line you really meant ‘you are alone’. Shorten that to ‘you’re alone’. In the seventh line it is ‘their life’. Get with it girl and make a mark. Then write a happy poem. Adeline