I really like the feeling of this poem, I think you have the ability to express it a little more sophisticatedly. I think you should take the time to try and rewrite this one. Maybe use the repetition to build the rhythm a little better, in some places it gets broken up.
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I really like the feeling of this poem, I think you have the ability to express it a little more sophisticatedly. I think you should take the time to try and rewrite this one. Maybe use the repetition to build the rhythm a little better, in some places it gets broken up.