Tuesday, May 23, 2017

I Hope That You Are My Last Love Comments

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I hope that you are my last love
Though I do see that you are not forever,
That your heart doesn't belong to me
As mine does belong to you.
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Saniya Galeyeva
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Jefferson Carter 23 May 2017

Saniya, I like this. The speaker's emotions shine through. Maybe change I will have to refuse FROM you to more idiomatic English. Perhaps the poem would improve with some strong and original figures of speech (the Phoenix simile is a little trite.) If you'd like, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com I'd like to know what you think of it. Yrs, JC

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Saniya Galeyeva

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Russia, Orenburg region, Sorochinsk
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