I hear your whisper in the wind,
Blowing past like there is no troubles.
I hear your whisper in my mind,
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I took special note of the line 'I hear you whisper and I hold you close'. Both before and after that I was sure you were not speaking of a living physical something you could actually hold close. So that part is not consistent as far as a reader is concerned. That's why I gave it a 7. GW62
Whispering and vanishing! May be you tried to hold him too close...could have let him whisper and remained silent hearing! A good write on disturbing romantic feels...10