Saturday, May 24, 2008

I Don'T Wanna Say Goodbye Comments

Rating: 2.0

So soft
the brief touch of your lips
on my cheek.
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Isabella Swan
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William Jackson 24 May 2008

Great poem. Well crafted and heart felt. However, kill the 'wanna' and write 'want to' instead. 'Wanna' does not fit with the formality of the rest of your poem.

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Isabella Swan

Isabella Swan

Georgetown, Guyana
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