'I Cut The Lady's Lawn Today' Comments

Well told. Unexpected twists. Sense of empathy and caring. A new take on shock and grief. Endstops, caesuras and radical enjambment suit the cadence, meaning and theme.

Love it. The line lengths perfectly suit the theme, every line emphasising the words, the radical enjambment, caesuras, and unexpected breaches of punctuation suit the unfolding, unexpected emergency, death and grief, and the respect and care for the lady. Nice moments of repetition adding to both rhythm and theme. Vivid showing. I can feel myself there, almost a part of you.