Wednesday, January 11, 2012

I Cut My Hair Today Comments

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I cut my hair today
That's an odd decision for a long term agreement
Somehow you had found the missing lot and packed yr life away
Noone to be blame, no excuse should be offer
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Niken Kusuma Wardani
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Adeline Foster 07 September 2012

The intent of this poem is deep and lovely. Yes, it does come across to those who are looking into the depth of your writing. Still, you have chosen to write in English and, yes, I understand that your English is limited. Again this poem is much too good to be lost in poor grammar. I have sent you a message outlining the changes. Adeline

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