Jamie Veloso

Jamie Veloso

Gingoog City, Misamis Oriental,9014, PHILIPPINES
Tuesday, December 15, 2015

I Clench My Heart Comments

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He was with his friends, eating with stones
Making fun as it feels
They recede as I came by crying
Moving forth back of my heart
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Jamie Veloso
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Susan Aparejo 25 December 2015

This type of poem is about the nuisance and hatred of one's love where people might think of someone that they could've reached. This poem brings tough emotions and life challenges making a way to be closer with your love ones. I wrote this poem for my crush, hoping that he will realize what I feel if he will not notice me and feel the same feeling that I do. I also dedicate this poem for my Mom. Mom, we always doubt on something because some things are complicated enough. Nuisance and hatreds of someone can't make us huge enough to win, but it helps us motivate ourselves to move on for someone we love. We should remember that the world continues to motivate us for a greater change. God bless and I hope you will get the thoughts and meanings of this very new poem of mine. - Maam Aparejo here it is.

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Susan Aparejo 25 December 2015

Hi Jamie, I read your poems here. Do not worry with mistakes. We are making mistakes, what is important is that we are willing to admit it. But the question is where's the mistakes lie? Making fun as it feels. Since you mentioned of friends, therefore you have to use they instead of it, then feel instead of feels. Its such a different between them. It is instead of Its

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Jamie Veloso 27 December 2015

Yes, Ma'am. I was so tired in that time, I didn't check my wordings and etc. But as I know that I've got those mistakes, I will take it. SaLAMAT maam.

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Kelly Kurt 23 December 2015

You did better than I could in a second language but there is still a way to go to get it down, Keep learning and keep writing

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Jamie Veloso 24 December 2015

Thank you Sir! Yes, actually I did not expect anything about this. I too myself feel that I've got mistakes and excuses on writing poem. I will keep your advice sir! Thank you! Merry Christmas!

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Jamie Veloso 24 December 2015

Thank you sir! I really appreciate it.

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Valsa George 23 December 2015

This being your initial attempt, a few mistakes can be excused! However your emotion of love shines bright in this poem! Shall I call it 'calf love' or are you really serious! Keep writing Jamie! Merry Christmas!

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Jamie Veloso 24 December 2015

Oh thank you so much! I will enhance and clear my mistakes about writing poems. Thank you so much! Merry Christmas.

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Dutendra Chamling 23 December 2015

Jamie Veloso! Beautiful poem. You have lovely heart.

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Jamie Veloso 23 December 2015

Thank you so much sir Dutendra! I am totally touched with the word Beautiful. God bless you sir! Merry Christmas and A Happy New Year.

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Dr Antony Theodore 20 December 2015

Motivation to a great change... when one has to suffer nuisance and hatred. a nice idea that you are trying to develop. All our inner feelings and the struggles that we undergo we try to put into words when we try to poetry. it is an outlet of all that is inexpressible in us. a good poem. God bless you. tony

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Jamie Veloso 20 December 2015

Oh. Thank you so much sir Tony Brahmin!

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Paul Warren 19 December 2015

The emotion shines through well done

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Jamie Veloso 19 December 2015

Sir Paul, thank you! I'm really grateful that you've read my poem. Thank you! God bless.

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Rita Marie Endrina 18 December 2015

I love it Jams! : D You nailed it.: D God bless! : D

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Jamie Veloso 19 December 2015

Rita, thank you. God bless you also.

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Gajanan Mishra 15 December 2015

love and love, good one, thanks..

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Jamie Veloso 18 December 2015

Oh thankyou so much. Thank you sir.

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Jamie Veloso 18 December 2015

Definitely, this is my first time to post a poem on a special website. And to be honest with you sir, thank you for voting. I am so glad and thankful.

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Jamie Veloso

Gingoog City, Misamis Oriental,9014, PHILIPPINES
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