I am something that I wasn’t suppose to be
I was human full of love and purity
Now I am savage a selfish killer
Who loves his own dignity
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'I kill myself every day every night With brutality I don’t know when that day will come When I will become we Cause till now I am still me' A very nice idea is here. Lovely.
wow that was really deep, so true, reallty good emotions i love them.. i was truly speechless, keep writing~ Hazel G.E
This is really good. No wasted words. The meaning and purpose are clear, the story is complete. The only reason it does not get a ten is because I reserve that for poems which are unique among poems. This one is good though, worthy of a 9.5 . GW62
Good rhythm and meaning. Expressed well, with a lot of depth.
indeed a very deep insight into human nature and how it just walks headlong into all sorts and manners of corruption simply to get head.
I am impressed with your insight of humanity. Greed and power can corrupt us all as we struggle to survive in a world that sees and respects only power. Well done
welcome to poemhunter. i liked your selection of topic and you did justice to your poem. well done and hope we'll see more poems in the coming days. good luck! !
Few days ago I sent a message to Mamta Agarwal on how a poets gets into the shoes of another person/object and writes a poem feeling the feelings of that other person or object. This is a perfect example of such great writing....Almost like the conceplt of my new poem HOT KILN, I wrote inspired by the behavier of my friend.Very well expressed, clean, lucid and powerfulll..........10++++++
'i kill myself..........' beautifully xpressed......thanx! ! !
'I kill myself every day every night With brutality I don’t know when that day will come When I will become we' Wonderful lines! Shabash.10 for this.
wow! ! I really like this goes to my fav list +10 a lil similar to my ARE U THERE regards anjali
wow! ! I really like this goes to my fav list +10 a lil similar to my ARE U THERE regards anjali (Report)