Tuesday, October 27, 2009

I Am My Own Exorcist Comments

Rating: 4.8

Voices and noises
Of demons screaming
Howls and growls
Doesn’t feel like I’m dreaming
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Ahmed Abdalla
COMMENTS
Elizabeth Padillo Olesen 11 December 2014

I love the way you formulate your lines. THe message you share in this poem is a universal truth. We are the only to be our own exorcist to free ourselves from that which binds us to darkness. The struggle involves determination and courage, these two things that your poem has well demonstrated. The last verse affirms the joyful victory of freedom! Keep on writing. I do appreciate your poems.

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Saadat Tahir 12 July 2010

amazing write Push, push They’re not so strong I will be victorious I will win before long Now I stand tall Now my demons are dismissed And from now on I am my own exorcist u have a gem.... u can be proud of it cheers

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Zakir Sayeed 13 December 2009

Perfectly written! ! :) loved it expecting more of you mr.abdulla! ! great keep up

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no name - 21 November 2009

Wow. Thats amazing. Keep writing. I would enjoy reading more of your poetry.

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Mirage Myriad 18 November 2009

I enjoyed your lines of powerful words, Ahmed.

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Ridah Ellahi 10 November 2009

personally, i like poetry that reflects a 'darker' side of things..therefore, all i can say to you is 'hats off! ' :)

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Brianna Slater 06 November 2009

I like it is really nice and kinda sad @ the same time but besides that I like it

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Anne Unknown 05 November 2009

I am speechless.....all I can say is BRILLIANT!

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Joan.L. Denton 05 November 2009

Berilliant, self belief is a wonderful thing! ! !

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Dev Poet 04 November 2009

WOW..... reminds me of something I went thru a yr ago I definitely can relate....10.0!

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Kieran J96 02 November 2009

cool poem. nice rhyming scheme. will u look at mine and maybe rate som plz.

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Shamik Kumar Bose 02 November 2009

Ahmad, you poem is quite lyrical, so you get a perfect 10 in the structural part. The content is also good. You get a 8. Overall 9. You deserve to write better poetry. This is a great start.

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Yherlisa Jimenez 01 November 2009

To be honest with you: It rhymes very good, but there is something missing in your poems, it is not finished, it's like You want to tell something after this poem, but I don't see it perfectly. Based on the poem: I think that there is God and there is devil, and that yet we choose who we allow to come into our live, and we need to make sure that God takes over everyday of our lifes.. God bless you. Hope to see more poems of yours. I invite you to checut my poems and rate them. Tell me what you think about them..

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Trenton Watson 01 November 2009

it rhymes thats for sure. Im glad you asked me to enjoy this nice poem. Nice as in experamental: D write more my friend

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Mehreen Mujeeb 01 November 2009

couldn't agree more. love the rhythm and rhyme. the tone is really engaging and flow puts everything together. the idea is expressed really well.

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Raj Nandy 01 November 2009

Yes, faith, belief and conviction in one's own self can really take us far! To become what we want to be - from what we are! A nice poem, well written! -Raj

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Norman Hale 01 November 2009

very nicely written very good

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Tania S. 01 November 2009

Very good. I love the symbolism.

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Aditya Mudbhary 01 November 2009

well expressed and u kept me into the poem frm the start gud write

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Keslea Howard 31 October 2009

Great! it makes you want to understand more about your emotions and is entertaining

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