James McLain

James McLain

From Tampa Florida And Still Living Near By
Thursday, June 29, 2023

How The World Governments Will Control Us In The Not To Distant Future Comments

Rating: 5.0

World governments conspire, their grip to maintain.
With calculated moves, their plans unfold,
Controlling minds, their intentions bold.
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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

Oh! I just spied that drink cup 'n' straw in the photo. KFC, Wendy's, or McDonalds? ?

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

James, for 1- your throwing your? opinions/ideas/beliefs out for all readers (including the 'government, no doubt' to see) AND for your very fine rhyming AND for a nice alliteration or two AND for the flow of the poem (& for the ice cream your sent) , I give you *****.

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

** the word 'espouse': 'espouse ĭ-spouz′ transitive verb To adhere to or advocate. To take in marriage; marry. To give (a woman) in marriage. I'd only heard the first definition before, that I recall.

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

I MAY not, or I May, endorse the 'negative-combined-with-positive' outlook you espouse *** (see 'espouse' definitions in another comment; only 1 of them fits here) but I defend your right to your opinion(s) . bri : )

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

last stanza: 'we'll throng'? I found 'throng' as a noun and as a verb (I've heard it used as a noun only I think) . Throng, as a verb, I found defined as 'crowd upon' and 'crowd into'. ok. bri ;)

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

(cont.) ...the U.S. was also 'supposed to be' a country of 'Liberty and Justice for All'. Well THAT hasn't always been the case, HAS IT? You continue to 'make fine rhymes'. Back to the reading. : )

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

'A promise of defiance'? Are we 'lookin' at' another revolution of people against a government? The U.S. government is supposed to be 'of the people, by the people, for the people' according to 1 U.S. president. But...(cont.) it

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

Who IS 'that' handsome man? stanza 7: 'Yet in the face of darkness, a spark remains'? James, I THOUGHT you were going to speak of me, Bri, & PLUG my POEMS! ! !

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

And so far the title is 'fine' [[except for your use of 'to', which should read 'too'. I'm glad you used 'Will Control' etc., not 'Are Controling', though soon enough I MAY need more control (then I may choose death over 'control') ! !

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

James, I'm through stanza 3. I 'love' 'media's manipulation'. BUT, WAIT. Your poem's words ARE 'media manipulated', NOT 'what I typed from my (limited) memory. I liked those two words for ALLITERATION'S SAKE, not their meaning. : )

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