How Much We Inflate? Comments

a wonderful point of view with layers of meaning to imbibe

good psychograph of a hide feminine inflation, verymuch impressive theme, well written words thank you author,10++

life game drawn in a philosophical frame...very good write, Vidi...you select a narrative style on your theme from start and maintain it skillfully till the end...and how much we inflate? ...till one desire balloon bursts...another balloon would be always there for the taking and for inflating... ‘Learn to Inflate, in its scope, not beyond’ is a line really good...good piece...thematic write...10

There are 2 schools of thought regarding a'Monotonous Tone', in poetics....The commentor below, is correct in the sense that monotony tends to tone-down the sprite of poetry...and that would be true, if your work here, were one that required a lot of pictorial/imagery.However, the theme, & style you chose, does not require a great deal of imagework.In fact, (IMO) ..it is through the employment of a monotone scheme, that you establish what i think you are attempting to do here...depict a graduated step /sojourn through life...through the eyes, mind & heart of this young man, via parable/lesson/philosophy. Phliolosophical poetics has its' abstract roots... your piece is a comely example of this claim.There be a very fine line, at times, between Monotonousity & Abstractivity.I like it...Solid penning, young lady! F j R 2009

Interesting psychological nuances, but For poetic 'lifting' it is better to release lines from monotonous tone … lines from «monitor» tone … Good luck to you...