I know you care, I know that you are there, I care about you,
I just wish that I could see you, hold you and feel the touch of your lips
against mine. I love you! I cant stop thinking about you. I feel like I am obsessed with you.
Only if you weren't careless, you would be standing here with me.You decide your fate; be with me and live with me forever, or die without a memory of those who you loved and hated. Don't play with fate, don't look for love, be young and free, because that is what you will only get; is the freedom. Why did you have to go? Our love was so young, how I miss the touch of your lip; so soft, moist, and smooth, they are like there almost perfect, but not. How I wish I could kiss them again. I miss how your body was so fine, muscular, and smooth like a baby's bottom. How I miss it so.
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alot of feelings in this poem...just some advice use more descriptive words...just to get more of a taste on what ur talking about..make the reader feel like they're there..that they feel what you feel..his lips, his arms around you..! great poem though..realy good~hazel
I also liked this one.You expressed the real emotion clearly
WOW! ... I really liked this one tyler.....ur expressions are amazing......... =)