It was just a little joke that you didn't bear;
You listened not, and are now so far my dear!
The words on your lips, the grievances in the heart:
You stepped on them and in your silence you crushed!
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Lalatendu, I can feel the emotion behind the lines, but your ESL(?) problems really harm the poem. Maybe stop writing poetry in English for a while and focus on further mastering the language? You could even read lots of good contemporary poetry in English (Billy Collins, Mary Oliver) to help you improve as a poet. If you'd like, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it. Yrs, JC