Saturday, April 11, 2015

Horizon Comments

Rating: 4.6

Horizon
Towards you as I walk on
To get nearer
you go farther
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Bharati Nayak
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Soran M. H 19 June 2020

This wonderful poem is beautiful and good in several ways: 1- It remains immortal as is outside the frame of time and space. 2- The poet does not speak about herself. 3- The word of horizon can be translated as a rhetorical metaphor. 4- Great harmony and tranquility meanings found in the content. Congratulations for this wonderful poem 10+ And it goes into my fav list

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Bharati Nayak 19 June 2020

Thank you Soran M.H. for your excellent review of the poem.

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Soran M. H 19 June 2020

You are the point Where blue mist of sky And lovely green of earth Mingle and merry So close and yet so distant.

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Horizon can be our aspiration, we feel at times we are too near to it; but the nearer we are the farther it appears. We are children after the dragonfly

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Akhtar Jawad 24 August 2019

Horizon is so distant from the human brain but again it's so close to the human heart. A great poem.

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Bharati Nayak 24 August 2019

Thank you Akhtar Jawad ji.It is really a pleasure to get your appreciation.I doubt my poetic ability. But appreciation from a great poet like you gives me much encouragement.Much regards and gratitude for your kind words.

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Prabhata Kumar Sahoo 01 March 2018

Horizon, waiting​ to get beyond, ..... Nice one.

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Soumya Ranjan Rout 19 November 2017

Horizon You are an illusion You are infinitely stretching points Where sky meets earth And the duet they dance Thank you sharing this lovely poem

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Bri Edwards 03 September 2017

this poem also is going now into September 2017's showcase (Part A) . thanks. bri :)

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Denis Mair 31 August 2017

Very nice use of the word MERRY. Of course BLUE MIST OF SKY and LOVELY GREEN OF EARTH can never marry, but when they make merry, the highs and lows of your world can mingle for a time. Sometimes one wishes they could be wrapped up all in one ball.

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Bharati Nayak 31 August 2017

Thank you Denis Mair for reading and commenting on the poem..You aptly pointed out the reason for choosing the word 'MERRY'in stead of MARRY.

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Bri Edwards 29 August 2017

ok, i started at the oldest end of your poem list and finally found one i had not commented on, and probably never read. i've now read it and find it charming? yes, maybe charming is one good word for it, and certainly insightful [and perhaps also “inciteful”] about the everyday experience of seeing ‘the horizon’. And it is told so well, with a bit of poetic flair. “Horizon You are an illusion” ……………..yes, I guess so, in a sense. It certainly is a different ‘animal’ from a........................................................mountain range which (pretty much) stays in one place! Favorite line: “So close and yet so distant.” ………………reminds me of some ladies I saw online last night! This I like much better than your ‘new’ one which I am planning to put into September’s showcase (Part A) , Flower Vase. Perhaps I’ll put this one in also or save it for another month. Thanks. to MyPoemList it goes. Bri :)

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Bharati Nayak 31 August 2017

Hi Bri, I am glad you liked this poem and picked to put it in your showcase, Thank you very much.

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Glen Kappy 21 June 2017

bharati, the horizon, subject of this poem, is ubiquitous, but this is only the second poem of hundreds (or thousands?) that i've read that focused on it- which makes it, i think- a great subject. and then there are the echoes of mythologies, the archetypes, that give it weight. in case you don't know it, i copy below, the other poem where it figures as a subject. the author, stephen crane, wrote great short poems which i think of as naked poems. there's little ornamentation in them, but there is great force in their few lines. hoping this finds you well in all ways, glen I saw a man pursuing the horizon; Round and round they sped. I was disturbed at this; I accosted the man. “It is futile, ” I said, “You can never —” “You lie, ” he cried, And ran on.

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Bharati Nayak 21 June 2017

Thank you Glen Kappy for your lovely words.I will certainly read Stephen Crane.Pursuing horizon is like we go for something which we will never get.

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Daniel Brick 29 April 2017

The horizon may be real but it's not a thing you can touch. As you say in the first stanza it keeps receding as you move toward it. It's not so much a thing as an event. That's how I read your beautiful (and delicate) description: ...THE POINT WHERE BLUE MIST OF SKY AND LOVELY GREEN OF EARTH MINGLE... That's a breath taking closeup of the larger life of Nature, the interaction of things we are unaware of until the poet sees it with her penetrating eye and then shares her vision through her striking imagery. YOU ARE AN ILLUSION - not any more! You hsve given us a way to experience the horizon's reality.

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Siddartha Montik 27 November 2016

Sure Horizon is not an illusion but not so quite so! ..nice verse where the sky and earth with their duet Dance.10++

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Edward Kofi Louis 26 November 2016

As i walk on! ! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

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Sahra Hussein 22 November 2015

I like this one a lot It is such a beautiful poem

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Bharati Nayak 23 November 2015

Thanks a lot for reading my poem and giving your nice comments.

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Allotey Abossey 07 August 2015

Excellent celebration of nature. I live it. Good work

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Bharati Nayak 24 July 2015

Thanks to all great minds who are adding their thoughts to this poem and making it more meaningful.

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Anil Kumar Panda 24 July 2015

The flat space that creates day and night.Awesome ink.Loved for its simplicity and flow.

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Creatively captured. You saw what we have all seen and penned it so uniquely. Well done my friend!

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Jeremy Horsford 16 May 2015

Very analytical and structured.

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A beautiful and contrasting points that meet on the horizon. Superb

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