Monday, January 27, 2014

Hope Comments

Rating: 5.0

She walks the shore.
While tears flow free.
She wonders if the waves can see.
Do they know this truth profound
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Noreen Carden
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Khairul Ahsan 21 June 2020

Hope is the vessel that takes us through the turbulent waves of the sea of life! Appreciate the excellent comment of @Daniel Brick.

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Dr Antony Theodore 14 September 2019

So she turns to greet the day. The water laps then slips away. Tides keep turning with the moon. at the end, you are giving us the power of determination.. thank u for your verses. tony

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Chiazo Egbukwu 13 May 2014

Her love will leave her heart behind' to a place best known to her.

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Daniel Brick 10 April 2014

What an amazing gift you gave that weeping woman! This poem is made up of sensitive words and quiet rhythms, a prayer is made up of words of faith and rhythms of hope. There is ample evidence in people's experience that prayer has positive benefits, so I'm sure this poem in some mysterious way benefitted the woman alone on the beach. I admire the steady flow of this poem, you found exactly the right way to express both the crushing defeat but also the beginning of a new life in the last lines. A VITA NUOVO

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Bri Edwards 24 March 2014

another day, another reading, same poem. i like it. :) bri was it only 3 weeks ago i read this the first time!

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Bri Edwards 03 March 2014

Noreen, thanks for the poem note. in the lines: Plans postponed cannot be spent. Tides ebb and flow no matter what, For human plans don't care a jot. i'm having some trouble deciding what you want to say here. who or what is doing the caring, and about what? ? i think you mean to say that the tide keeps its schedule as it doesn't care at all for human plans. if that IS what you mean to say, i think i would just change the line: For human plans don't care a jot. TO: either: 1. For human plans, tides don't care a jot. OR 2. For human plans don't mean a jot. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - noreen, you appear to be a romantic and an optimist. i am not the former, but i generally am the latter. JOT noun noun: jot; plural noun: jots 1. a very small amount. you didn't care a jot synonyms: iota, scrap, shred, whit, grain, crumb, ounce, (little) bit, jot or tittle, speck, atom, particle, scintilla, trace, hint; More informalsmidgen, tad not a jot of evidence - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - i esp. like this line: Plans postponed cannot be spent. ............well, maybe spent at a later date? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - yes, though her heart may be bruised, it can recover nicely..............if she's lucky! nice rhyming, nice change in 'tone' from stanza one to stanza two. thanks for sharing. :) bri

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Cassandra Jasmine 02 March 2014

Wow! This is beautiful! A 10 from me!

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S.zaynab Kamoonpuri 09 February 2014

Wow u captured her emotions and pensive jilted feel in a fabulous poem! Kudos fav poetess.

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Fiona Schwartzinoff 01 February 2014

Beautiful! Just beautiful. Hey, feel free to check out my rubbish some time. :)

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Gary H 31 January 2014

Whaaat fantastic, awesome as always.

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Amitava Sur 30 January 2014

A very encouraging poem Noreen. What ever stumbles or barriers are in front never stop, just walk on with hope......... that itself is life...... loved it.

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Geetha Jayakumar 30 January 2014

Beautiful poem Noreen. Though it began with sadness, but ended with hope...In between both the emotions, were her tears fell, for it takes time for one to heal. Loved it as it ended with positivity.

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Pradip Chattopadhyay 28 January 2014

you paint her sadness but the final brush is of hope. a lovely poem.

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Marcus Mckinley 27 January 2014

we all need time to heel. this poem takes us through that process with a gentle flow

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