She drifted in with the mist
As if kissed by the air
Floating there in the half light
Blessed by time and the sight of home.
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You have a beautiful music with lots of internal rhymes, assonance, etc. Your poem is practically a textbook of internal music! Helps me! Mostly, I feel they work very well, and the images are very subtle and sweet. I have a little trouble with the 'rich lady' line, it doesn't seem quite as elegant as the rest.
A lovely poem. Well done! I agree with what Herbert writes about it. Music to the ears...