Holiday Cocktails Comments

thanks for comments bri. didn't know you could only do one topic, thought it said to add as many as it covers to maximise it getting read, that's what i thought anyway. I will look up the rules again. Feel free to add what you wish Bri. to your showcase. It is a memory from a holiday we had when we were young in a caravan, we aren't travellers lol :)

this one 'BEGS to have a more detailed 'poet's note', BUT i'll be satisfied (i guess) with For my sister. SO, your sister travels with a caravan and wears umbrellas in her hair? cute. btw, i notice FIVE poem topics listed. i thought one topic per poem was the max! ? i wonder if you meant for the third line to go on and on, making the next line so short, or did PH do that? PH has done some tricks to me before. but if it is the way you wrote it, then i accept it. i especially liked: She was collecting these as mementos, Wouldn't even give me one! ....................... mean old(er) sister! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! and WHO could not like: As she spewed up her fancy cocktails Down the toilet and groaned 'Never again...' .............................. THAT shoulc bring memories back to some readers! i was going to compliment the rhyming, but i looked over it again, and i see there is none. i STILL like the poem. of course we'll never know if it is a true story. i sometimes find myself forgetting that all i read in PH poems may NOT be true! this shall go to MyPoemList and into Secion A of my/our A showcase for PH poets [October editioin], a display of PH poets and poems found on my site each month for the past 9 months. thanks for sharing. bri :)