Hitchhiking Through Mississsippi On A Summer Afternoon Comments

I love this Kerouac Korrective... I'm pondering your leaving out the last line?

Oh! I just absolutely love this, Steve! What a wordsmith you are! ! ! Thanks for sharing this. Hell, thanks for writing this! One tiny suggestion, add a comma just before 'broke my reverie'....other than that, I'd say, IMO, this is perfect.

A compelling narrative Steve, with some great imagery - loved this: 'rippling currents of vapor blurred the horizon.' and a positive ending too. Nice one! Kind regards, Justine.