His Story Comments

'Just not to be lost in her maze chain' Rachel Ann Butler

the story is beautiful..it is always happening in true situation..love comes at first sight.then love wth admiration, then u wanted to be loved by her..then, in that situation, many probs arise, , what if....if she doesn't love you? ..so u must consider many situations too..u should have to consider her feelings.....all in all, this story is beautiful..

you told a story ina poetic way...thats why the poem was long....i liked it...keep writing and set your feelings free.

tat was a very good story and you asre able to use your words..it was long but i read it all..excellent Mohammed..

Yes! Paper is your dear friend. The paper will always be there for you. Writing is a passion and a love that is most rewarding. Your poems will forever stay true to you. You write a good story with facts from your experience. This is good material. That which hurts us the most deeeeeepest, is usually that which makes up the best poetry. But! On the other side...That which makes us the most happiest ever, also will make a great, great story! Don't ever give up on yourself or your ability to write how you feel. You'll only become better! Happier too! ! ! Deborah Cromer

His story is a remarkable love story.You're very talented Mohamed.Keep writing!