His Mountains/Her Sea Comments

WOW! This poem is so much more than I expected. I thought there would be a pairing of metaphors from nature for each person and that would be the poem. But that is only one element. The female speaker has deprived herself of contact with mountains and men, Her self-absorption is a dead end. The dynamic which pulls together is difficult to articulate, but the stanza which shows it happening is BRILLIANT, beginning HIS HANDS, TO DIG THE SOIL etc. I love that stanza, and also the closing three lines which put them in accord A BLENDED BEAUTY, LACED IN STILLNESS. It's beautiful, I'm convinced, solipsism is conquered, love triumphs!

Many excellent aspects to this piece. The cadence is lovely. Like Jacqueline, I found the penultimate stanza moving, and I love A blended beauty, laced in stillness and especially your choice to add a pause in the line's middle with the comma.