Tuesday, June 19, 2012

Him...No...Him Comments

Rating: 5.0

Just a second, no a minute, maybe more
With Him I wish to spend eternity
His touch is golden, so uplifting, hands so strong
Im sure he is my destiny
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Ralph O'Grantson
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Jane Trott 25 July 2012

I think it isn't easy to choose in such situation. But I hope she will be fine.

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Brook Mabry 06 July 2012

Speechless! This is absoulutly great! Im glad to see you write about real life things, that can be hard to do, with all the confusment great job!

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Precious Okidika 05 July 2012

Ralph you are good. I sense alot of your background in the poem. On the whole good one

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Captain Cur 04 July 2012

The pulls and pushes of confusing relationships. This is a tricky topic to write about. Writing about two people in a relationship are difficult, adding a third person or dimension can cause the reader to lose focus. I do sense the humor in your words and of course, let us wait and see whom she chooses.

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Roong S 02 July 2012

Oh..you are a wonderful poet! ! I enjoyed it

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Kaila George 01 July 2012

Ohhhh theres more...love it....makes the ready want for more...will the end ever come....can we wait that long....pouts...I cant....smiles. Cant wait to see the ending.

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Valerie Dohren 01 July 2012

Wonderful piece of writing, well done.

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Darkangel Flyfree 28 June 2012

Wow I really like this poem! ! It can be so frustrating having two people that is dear to your heart, but always go with what your heart tells you. Looking forward to the ending.

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Pranab K Chakraborty 27 June 2012

Better you end it. No need of trangular war. You make relation with eternal beauty of poetry and art. Will get much to shelter your thirsty soul. Man is basically alone......Any way, the poem is no doubt very interesting but getting confused whom are you confronting with....your destiny OR the third person who wants to flag on your loving land...that is your beloved one. Really confusing. Otherwise nice write.

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Abhishek Tiwari 26 June 2012

Thats true..a feeling that can be put off only through the poetry.. Him..or..him

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Amber S 25 June 2012

nice poem. i like how u expressed yourself in this poem. keep up the good work.

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Unwritten Soul 24 June 2012

You did job as well as u wanted to do, so clear as you described there, i like it! ! ! it was like ok i am going here but then wait, i think...hmmmm....opsss no it's not and arhhhh... the write is good, i am sure you can bring more in the next write.keep it up_Unwritten Soul

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