Just a second, no a minute, maybe more
With Him I wish to spend eternity
His touch is golden, so uplifting, hands so strong
Im sure he is my destiny
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Speechless! This is absoulutly great! Im glad to see you write about real life things, that can be hard to do, with all the confusment great job!
Ralph you are good. I sense alot of your background in the poem. On the whole good one
The pulls and pushes of confusing relationships. This is a tricky topic to write about. Writing about two people in a relationship are difficult, adding a third person or dimension can cause the reader to lose focus. I do sense the humor in your words and of course, let us wait and see whom she chooses.
Ohhhh theres more...love it....makes the ready want for more...will the end ever come....can we wait that long....pouts...I cant....smiles. Cant wait to see the ending.
Wow I really like this poem! ! It can be so frustrating having two people that is dear to your heart, but always go with what your heart tells you. Looking forward to the ending.
Better you end it. No need of trangular war. You make relation with eternal beauty of poetry and art. Will get much to shelter your thirsty soul. Man is basically alone......Any way, the poem is no doubt very interesting but getting confused whom are you confronting with....your destiny OR the third person who wants to flag on your loving land...that is your beloved one. Really confusing. Otherwise nice write.
Thats true..a feeling that can be put off only through the poetry.. Him..or..him
nice poem. i like how u expressed yourself in this poem. keep up the good work.
You did job as well as u wanted to do, so clear as you described there, i like it! ! ! it was like ok i am going here but then wait, i think...hmmmm....opsss no it's not and arhhhh... the write is good, i am sure you can bring more in the next write.keep it up_Unwritten Soul
I think it isn't easy to choose in such situation. But I hope she will be fine.