'Hieros Gamos' Comments

Another very interesting, an unexpected title...I really love the last two verses of the penultimate stanza...truly the reflection of twin-souls. We find a home ready for us in every city -this verse shows that home is not a place, but a person which holds our heart. A lovely poem!

....truly a beautiful write....i am presuming a marriage of the gods...since swans do not have hands.... and birds generally do not eat breadcrumbs from someone's outstretched hand.....our only choice left is the gods which was mentioned in the poet's notes....beautifully written how you described the abilities of the gods...especially how everyone understands and comprehends their speech....and no one can see what they see..truly an amazing write...

Heiros Gamos is itself an interesting concept. I am unsure of the identity of the newlyweds, are they gods, or swans, or mere humans? I feel like they are at least analogous to the swans, who are monogamous, fire-eyed, and divinely led with breadcrumbs. Mixed with excellent imagery are common-feeling sentences, which I try to stay away from in my poetry. The third stanza could have expanded on the mirror in a fun or interesting way, and the fourth stanza could have done something with threshold. It was not clear that marriage, unification, or spiritual gifts were a theme. I am excited to read your other poems.