Saturday, September 2, 2006

Here Are My Eyes Comments

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Here are my eyes
Drown them in yours...

Here are my lips
...
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Renu Rakheja a.k.a Tranquil Ocean
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Ramesh Rai 19 August 2019

Grand write. Thoughts are evolving through profound ocean of wisdom and love. Go ahead.

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Tissa Calvert 26 August 2008

I love this poem and it is very beautiful keep up the work

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rajagopal haran 14 April 2008

unique style..vibrant words...well written

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Catastrophe King 30 August 2007

My Response TO: Here Are My Eyes He felt some radiance, as he drowned her deer like eyes in his; He sensed her lustrous passion, when obscured her lips by his! He caressed the warmth of fleece; as her skin dissolved in his, He softened his robust heart, when it was time to reunite with hers! That was all a dream – unreal. What a dream, that was! ? ! He cherished his blemished dreams, as she saturates them in hers; He nurtured his failing hopes, to realize them together with hers! He sapped the going strength of his thoughts, to encourage hers; He awaited her soul to enlighten and affect her power over his! He brought his incensed soul to fore; to gratify her mounting soar He tormented a damned life and wished for a final hatred from her!

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Anirban Dasgupta 13 April 2007

Wow...ur a master in using the right words...keep it up...

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Lin B 12 February 2007

That is such an impressive piece of writing. Your words are so graceful. ~Linley~

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Petra Creffield 21 January 2007

This is beautiful :) P

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Sandra Osborne 20 December 2006

Very nice, reminds me of some of my own work, although I thought the ending might be stronger.

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Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr 07 December 2006

Most innovative work, T.O..not to mention impassionately seductive, but in a very tasteful style...The Readers love it, PH loves it...me? I love it, and it rightfully belongs at its current elite status...Congrats & kudos on you, my dear! Frank

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John Tiong Chunghoo 06 December 2006

this is lovely, tranquil.

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Melvina Germain 10 September 2006

Here's love--an absolutely beautiful piece-I love it--Melvina

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Salir Airosa 10 September 2006

Beautiful poem, you captured the heart and soul of love, and I think your readers too! :)

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Duncan Wyllie 10 September 2006

And heres us thinking WHAT A GREAT PIECE THIS IS Thankyou Darling for sharing your wonderful words Love duncan X

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jack russell 10 September 2006

The soulful height of romanticism....loved it :) Jack.

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Anirbit Mukherjee 08 September 2006

Very passionate. But potentially sublime

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Ruby Root 07 September 2006

Hi Tranquil, It is so romantic and meaningful. I really love this poem. I think it holds so much hope for people in love. I hope if I ever fall in love I feel this way too. You are a romantic writer. Excellent poem.

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R H 06 September 2006

A lyrical, dreamy piece, beautifully composed. Justine

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Sridhar RVL 06 September 2006

'Here are my dreams Suffuse them with yours... Here are my hopes Fulfill them with yours...' Treat of life. Hope

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Preeti - is here! 04 September 2006

This is so lovey-dovey and it flows beautifully. Great work! Preets

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Tailor Bell 02 September 2006

tight structure yet unrestricted in delivering a message of deep love. -Tailor

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