Saturday, November 23, 2013

Her Nails Comments

Rating: 5.0

She was sitting there, watching a show,
Talking to her peers, laughing and joking.
She was tall and slim, gracefully dressed,
Her beauty enhanced, by her fashion sense.
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Khairul Ahsan
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Dr Dillip K Swain 15 September 2022

I have never read a poem that has so brilliantly described nails. Beautiful

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Khairul Ahsan 11 January 2014

@ Bri Edwards, Thanks for both of your comments on this poem. 'one's OWN BACK or that of ANOTHER.....' - Well, definitely of 'another' (here I mean the reader!) . Yes, the rhyme finally came in the last two lines, which came naturally, and I thought it better not to disturb the natural flow of thoughts by struggling to find rhymes. Thanks for appreciating whatever little rhyme is there. Yes, I am a fan of Elena Plotkin too, among others, though she doesn't seem to have read my poems these days, as she used to do earlier. About Connie Yost's 'schmaltz', I looked up the meaning of the word in Oxford Dictionary (Online) , which says: 'excessive sentimentality, especially in music or films: at the end of the film the audience are drowned in a sea of schmaltz' - So, I agreed with Connie Yost, inasmuch as my poem did not contain 'excessive sentimentality'. I am not sure if she had meant something else by that word. I, too, wasn't familiar with the word so I, too looked it up online. 'i think the poem was fine without schmaltz! :) bri' - Thanks for sharing this thought.

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Bri Edwards 10 January 2014

i especially enjoyed these lines: But shaped like Reese Witherspoon's chin. Weren't a threat, or even good for self defense, Just good to claw one's back, in moments tense. one's OWN BACK or that of ANOTHER............. just wondering. i'd like to have reese claw my back (gently of course) but don't tell my wife i said that! ! ! ! another thing i liked, aside from the meaning of those lines, was that you gave me a rhyme, FINALLY! i came to your page after hearing you are a fan of elena plotkin. me too! thanks for sharing this fine portrait of a woman, even if it is only skin-deep. bri :)

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Khairul Ahsan 28 December 2013

@ Lyn Paul, Thank you very much for your nice comment and the generous rating of 10/10. Yes, I agree, it was a different kind of subject.

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Khairul Ahsan 28 December 2013

@Connie Yost, 'I think, however, that your poem is lacking in schmaltz.' I agree. Thanks a lot for sharing the thought.

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Khairul Ahsan 26 December 2013

@Sandra Regan, Thanks for reading my poem and leaving your comment here. I am truly inspired. Hope your desires were fulfilled in November.

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Khairul Ahsan 26 December 2013

@ Beauteous Victory, Thanks for reading my poem and leaving your kind words here. Glad to know that you really enjoy reading my poetry. I am really privileged to receive so kind appreciation from you. Thank You!

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Khairul Ahsan 25 December 2013

@ Naida Nepascua Supnet, Thanks for your inspiring words on my poem. Yes, in this poem I have made a fanciful departure from the usual praise of a lady's face, curves or other body parts and settled on her well maintained and manicured fingers and nails that caught my eyes. Thanks for your appreciation.

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Connie Yost 04 December 2013

My! You did let your imagination run wild that time! ! I think, however, that your poem is lacking in schmaltz.

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Lyn Paul 04 December 2013

A 10 just for something so different and you have described all so well. Thank you

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Khairul Ahsan 26 November 2013

@ Valsa George, You are right, it is usual for a man to praise a woman's face, eyes, curves, etc etc. In the instant case, her beautifully laid fingers on the table, also as seen when she moved her hands and talked, looked more beautiful than anything else. Thanks for alluding to Browning's line: 'Your hand is a woman of itself'! ' It's beautiful, and relevant.

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Sandra Regan 25 November 2013

I love that her nails were like Reese's chin. :) Please check out: Waiting for November

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Naida Nepascua Supnet 24 November 2013

haha, this is a very good observation on women you can come up with a great poem by watching things and people and this time- nails not everyone will pay attention to it-more, write a poem about it. nice, keen eyesight you got there. What I remember about Reese W. is a pair of french tips- very very nice poem.

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Valsa George 23 November 2013

Usually a poet in describing the beauty of a woman will be focussing on her face, eyes or figure. Here you have beautifully described the well manicured slender fingers of a woman in graceful movement! A deviation from the usual track! Yea, some have long tapering fingers with well shaped nails! Very pretty to look at! The dress sense definitely adds to the beauty of a woman! Browning's Andrea Del Sarto in describing Lucrezia's (his lady love) beauty says- 'Your hand is a woman of itself'! Beautiful write! !

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