Her Large And Lovely Dark Eyes Comments
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It is a heartless gray day today
...a gray and rainy day today
I wonder if it is a blue-sky day today
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Reading this poem, I am reminded of the hundreds who have succumbed to the the killer virus and are made to be carried to the grave unsung and unattended sans long queues of mourners or tolling of bells. Their 'eyes are closed to the shadows' of gloom gathering in the world. Their worries, fears and anxieties are locked down for ever! A touching tribute to a lady who fought a brave fight for survival and finally surrendered to the final call.....!
Valsa- - I think the world has to wake up and realize there are things in nature that we cannot dismiss as easy to defeat. This corona virus is a malignant killer of our loved ones and we cannot even have funerals to give respect to their lives.
Deep and elegantly crafted in verse with rhythmic splendour. Lovely and amazing use of words. Thanks for sharing.
Chinedu- - I believe the below comment was for you but ended up running free between comments- -hank you for reading! ! ! We still miss her! But God blessed her family with her presence for so much longer than expected- -stay blessed my friend!
Thank you for reading! ! ! We still miss her! But God blessed her family with her presence for so much longer than expected
I wondered if today would be a dingy gray day ...This day that was always a relentlessly coming day When her poor worn-out body would be carefully carried ...And under the cold and muddy ground be buried.......heartrending expression. Touchingly penned. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you for reading! ! ! We still miss her! But God blessed her family with her presence for so much longer than expected
Of course, you're welcome and I look forward to reading more by you! About my pen name... It came to me out of the blue a few weeks back and seemed to suit my inner climate well, so I went with it. Glad you think it's interesting - I do plan to stick with it and see what happens :)
Compellingly sad, but sometimes people need towed into dismal reality through brave poets such as yourself.
Thank you for reading and commenting. I am fascinated by your nom de plume! ! ! !
A haunting stunning poem that touched the sadness in my heart. I am sorry to hear of your loss and I do feel for her family. She is so young. I am reminded again to open my eyes and feel grateful for my time on Earth having people who love me unconditionally.10+
We all had been given fair warning- -from birth on... but she had beaten all odds year after year and lived such an adventurous life that it wasn't the prime thing in our mind when we saw her. Yes, we all need to live life fully and make it as full of good things as possible. Thank you for your kind comments my friend
a sad and moving poem of a life left in ruin? ....................well written Susan
she lived life to the full but she died of the flu at the age of 37 and she is so grievously missed by her brother, husband and nieces- - life is a bit darker without her
This is a sad story, and a great tribute. Beautifully composed, with lovely rhymes!
Thank you, Mihaela, for reading this and writing a comment about your experience with the piece. I appreciate hearing readers' take on a poem both in general and in specific.
those large lovely dark eyes of hers don't care They are closed to the shadows gathering in the room- beautifully written poem.
Sorry, Marieta, to take so long to reply to your comment- PH has stopped notifying me of comments made on my poems so I have to go search each poem to see if there is a new comment. Thank you for reading it and choosing my favorite lines in this piece!
i like this, susan, like the lyricism and steady movement in it. it makes me think lullaby, albeit a melancholy one. it also makes me think of my first open-casket experience—which stayed with me and turned up later in my poem panty hose meditation (yes, a peculiar start for the subject of death) . -glen
Glen- Sorry to take so long to reply to your comment- PH has stopped notifying me of comments made on my poems so I have to go search each poem to see if there is a new comment. Wow! Thank you for pointing out you found lyricism and steady movement in this piece. Wow- thank you- I was so grieving I didn't do anything on purpose but try to express my emotions.
The words in the poem made me melancholic, as I read the day and room smothered in gloom. But painfully it made me upset.I was unable to take the pain in that mood. he cheated death...and the name cheated me. Sorry to write like this. But I think you are that great to bear with me and my remarks. Yours fan. Subhas. Part 3
Yikes. There was warning though. I wrote what it was about in The Poet's Notes About the Poem. I wrote about the awful pain and grief my granddaughters are feeling, my daughter is feeling, and my beloved son-in-law is feeling. Still feeling. It was a cathartic write for me. You are certainly free to dislike the poem. I would not change, however, either its title or anything in it- it speaks some of the pain in our hearts.
I started reading this poem, attracted as I was by its name, assuming it to be a romantic number. Shocked to find myself in a funeral ceremony. Please Susan. This was allopathic, a bitter pill clad with a sweet cover. I was excited to find a lot more about the beauty and ecstasy behind those pair of large eyes. But by the great wishes of God, she survived for some more years. Part 2
I was shocked to find myself there too. Took the flu six days to bring down that young woman. Met her when she was young even before her brother married my daughter. She had so outlived her doctors' prophecies that one didn't look at her vibrant life and see death
For the first time in life, I was upset with you. You must be careful with the christening of your poems, as they appear like our nascent born babies. I don't read a poem when I come to Poem hunter, I come here to read a poet. I never read try to read a second senior poet, the day I choose you. Part 1
Oh, dear, I must read on hoping you don't cut me out of your reading list
part 2 She doesn't know what kind of day it is out there ...those large lovely dark eyes of hers don't care: : the reader pauses for breath here. And more shock is coming: They are closed to the shadows gathering in the room: : touching the soul... ...where both day and room are smothered in gloom.: : What an expression! A trillion 100s and onto mypoemlist for a re...
Oh! a trillion trillion stars for a reviewer such as you... you empower me and I cannot tell you how good that feels, my friend!
Hi Susie, A shocking presentation; The name of the poem suggested it to be a love poem. Of course, it exudes the poet's love to the deceased. But the name does not suggest a demise, so I was taken aback. A very powerful presentation of the subject, in such a short poem. The first stanza makes the foreground ready for the poem. Very forceful: It is a heartless day! The opening line-immense!
I absolutely love your critiques! You give me priceless feedback and what catches your eye, what works and why! ! ! ! You really examine the poems you read which makes you a very valued member of the writing community. Thank you for being the kind of poet and man you are!
It is a beautiful blue poem having heartfelt depiction with groovy collocation. The way of presentation is unique and fantastic. I would like to quote the impressive lines.......... I wondered if today would be a dingy gray day ...This day that was always a relentlessly coming day When her poor worn-out body would be carefully carried ...And under the cold and muddy ground be buried. Thanks for sharing.
Kumarmani Mahakul - - -I cannot reply to your kind comment on my poem by using the reply box because for three weeks now it has not been working. [So I shall use the comment box to reply but I sadly think that notifications won't tell you I respected your time by replying. I like your phase beautiful blue poem- -that was a well-thought out description of this lament for the death of a young woman mourned by my family and hers. [Reply box working now! ]
Bharati Nayak- - -Thank you for reading my work and commenting. It means very much to me especially since you have been very busy lately!
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Through this poem I want to convey you that poetess Susan Williams lives a life of her own... admirable personality