Monday, February 8, 2016

Her Innocence Comments

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The night passed with eyes wide opened
by looking at the moon passing through clouds
time bubbles busted one by one as
I desperately looked here and there
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M. Asim Nehal
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Edward Kofi Louis 12 February 2016

With Joy in the arms of your lover. Thanks for sharing.

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Souren Mondal 09 February 2016

I agree with Nosheen. Waiting for the one we love has a charm of its own, too painful yet too pleasing.. And in the end when the beloved arrives, all the waiting is paid off to perfection. A romantic offering Asim. Thanks for sharing :)

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Nosheen Irfan 09 February 2016

Waiting for beloved has a charm of its own. Though moments are agonizing but once the beloved appears, it seems worth the agony. You have used some very rich imagery to describe a night of wait that was fulfilled at dawn n the innocence of the beloved made all the pain go away.10

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Kelly Kurt 08 February 2016

It is easy to let impatience draw the wrong conclusions. I'm glad it all worked out

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