Her Big Tail Caused Endless Trails Comments

Kim's opinions aside, I and Asim and Rajan seem to disagree with him/Kim. : ) bri Maybe he didn't have his eyeglasses on?

The very last, tip-of-the-tail, part of my very last comment here (for now anyway) may not have been completely complete. : ) bri

(cont.) 'double'...LEAVE IT BE. IT MAY STIMULATE SOME READERS' MIND WHICH DON'T OTHERWISE GET STIMULATED (much) . Bri's last line: '...it also causes a wideswath of RUBBLE.Z

GEE, CAN I TAKE 1/2 OF ONE STAR BACK? ? TOO LATE! ! And PH DOES NOT ALLOW DOUBLE-VOTING. Ah, 'double', the poem's last word & THE WORD which caused me to wonder. (cont.)

Sheeya, In a message to me days ago, I THINK you hinted for me to read this poem, but until today (while reviewing some messsages we have exchanged) I neglected your 'hint'.

(cont.) I assume you know the sexual significance of the word 'heat' in regards to animal readiness to mate. I humbly suggest 'failed-by-tail'. See, I used hyphens.

THIS gave me my loudest laugh yet! ! ! 'Kitty once felt the heat and was excited to see a male. When she sat in front of the mate to mate he failed by tail.' (cont.)

while her big tail caused endless trails.'...while her tail sweeps everything off to the sides? ? With this kitty, you would lose your rhyme, but you COULD use 'trials' also. ;)

I just gave this five (5) stars, but I'd better finish reading your poem NOW, and I WANT TO ALSO! ! stanza 8 gave me ANOTHER laugh. I feel that 'flare' or 'flair' is ok, but, as this is a female, I like 'flair' moreso. : )

Sheeya, I've only (in 11? years on PH) seen the 'tip of the iceberg' of poems here. BUT I now feel you are advancing towards (or ARRIVED at) the TOP of the 'funny-lady-poets' pile. (if not the men's pile as well) .

AND..these 'mice' sound MUCH HAPPIER than the poor little mousey gal or guy which 'I caught' [in a RAT trap] this week. Talk of 'OVERKILL'! ! ! ! Poor kid.: (

'She couldn't squeeze through narrow gaps, her big tail got caught in all the traps.' Those are among 'my favorite' lines of YOURS here.

Funny and interesting poem, I don't know how to react but enjoyed it thoroughly.

I am lost within the tail. Your poetic tail is also growing fast, I can assure nobody will be able to match your heat on PH. Wonderful poem with great Rhyme. Bri aka Brian will have his own observations on your LONG TAIL and ITS TRAIL.

Don't tr to read too much between the legs and beyond the tail.