Tuesday, July 13, 2021

Heartwood Comments

Rating: 2.0

I came for you, not for the wood
that you make me touch, polished
with a goldjointed split here and there --
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Luis A. Estable 13 July 2021

First, touch should be in the past tense to agree with polished and the accord of the verse. The rest of the poem lacks logical meaning. It is a bit confusing in what it tries to convey. The lines are sloppy put together.

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