Saturday, November 24, 2007

Heartless Time Comments

Rating: 4.1

Time passes by without concern for me.
Each tick rings a tock as it passes free.
Spring rains pass and summer's gone,
Fall and winter just keep moving on.
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Atsiylah Atty Garfinkel
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Catrina Heart 06 February 2009

Brilliance in composition my friend...woven with fine rhymes...10

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Chitra - 19 July 2008

beautifully expressed, great rhyme

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Elizabeth Sheaffer 11 December 2007

A lesson I'm still in the process of coping with. Very well-written, with a good rhythm and a great rhyme scheme. Keep up the good work! Warmest Regards, Eliza Stine

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