Heart And Soul Revised Comments

Very nice, indeed. Love the imagery, diction and work you put into this.

How easily a heart can be broken. And how much healing can be found in the compassionate words, the kind actions of another heart. Beautiful imagery, such lucid writing. The cadence of the rhythm and the gentleness of the rhyme only accentuate the beauty of this piece. Well done! Bravo! NB :)

Outstanding write Noreen with inspired lines bursting with such beauty about how lonely people can feel but when somebody reaches out to them it gives them hope for a better future! Congratulations on your stunning poem been selected as poem of the day!

I didn't see your poem before John Brown's advice, but I'm guessing that it had only two verses at that time. The first verse has the rhyme scheme AA, BB, CC, DD. The second verse is AA (almost) , BB, CD, ED. Third verse: no rhymes (not necessarily a bad thing; it still flows beautifully) Fourth verse: AB, CB, then lines 6 and 8 assonance only. Very well written; I enjoyed it very much.

I didn't see your poem before John Brown's advice, but I'm guessing that it had only two verses at that time. The first verse has the rhyme scheme AA, BB, CC, DD. The second verse is AA (almost) , BB, CD, ED. Third verse: no rhymes (not necessarily a bad thing; it still flows beautifully) Fourth verse: AB, CB, then lines 6 and 8 assonance only. Very well written; I enjoyed it very much.

While the soul is on its lonely walk It steals its light from heavens brim Its flight makes angels weep Lyrical imagery that is just beautiful. Thank you!

Hello, Noreen! Your poem sounds up-lifting. And truly said, hope is that force which raises a soul up to the sky, but only faith can keep it there from falling.

Hi Noreen We have been out of touch since last May when I posted two comments on this poem. I just re-read them and they say everything that I can say in words abougt the imapact of your poem. Let me just add since last May I have composed four love poems, and previously I had composed zero love poems. So I read this poem with a newe consciousness of the importance of love poems to keep our hearts open, perceptive and receptive

A beautiful poem Noreen. An exquisite description of loneliness and the heartbreak it brings. Then the uplifting experience of knowing that someone cares and understands. A very special piece of poetry from what must be a very special person, so much feeling here.

I came back to this poem because I earlier found its strength of expression and purpose so energizing. I just finished reading your homage to the uncle killed in WWII and I'm feeling the overall sadness that comes with confronting lives that are finished, events that are intractable, feelings that have no future - all these losses pile up in our minds EVEN THOUGH they are not necessarily personal. But your poem gives me such faith in hearts and souls that the sadness will soon be replaced by HOPE - and that is the special gift HEART AND SOUL holds out to us every time we read it.

This poem is filled with so much tenderness that its appreciative readers may not at first realize it is also imbued with strength. It is that strength which it embodies and conveys to its readers which I consider so necessary in keeping heart and soul healthy and hale. The language of the poem is so convincing, and the movement is stately and inevitable with your impressive eight-line stanzas effortlessly carrying the weight of the argument. If I did not know English and someone would recite this poem, the rhythms would convey its meaning to me, heart and soul.

to me this is beautiful, particularly the third verse, well done!

Really good and so true.

Noreen, you nearly blew me away with the balance of the spiritual/dichotomy in the first paragraph and the last stanza is beyond beautiful. Great write! Cheers!

I always admire a poet who is able to write a poem in rhyme.....that is when it is well done as is this one.

A lovely poem Noreen, inspirational and reflective.

beautiful. My thought took flight with the ssoul and melody of the poem. Fantastic write

What a lovely poem! I remember having posted a comment earlier! But unfortunately now I understand that it didn't reach you! Human heart breaks with no explosive sound! But one touch from a loving hand can fuel the breaking heart with life and it may take wings and fly! It is love and understanding from fellow beings, that everyone seeks! !

Beautiful, heart warming Noreen

A good poem, with a very optimistic ending. I would have liked at least one more verse though.