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you don't have to write your poems like everybody else does. then it would be boring. i mean, look at sylvia plath. hers didn't even rhyme. good job :)

Hey danyelle its a good poem but....

this was soo beautifully written....i liked ALOT! ! ^-^

THIS IS A VERY NICE PIECE TO READ BUT YOU SHOULD OF ONLY A FEW WORDS ON THE LINE BECAUSE THE WAY YOU WROTE IS IN A STORY AND THATS NOT HOW YOU WRITE POEMS..

Interesting. You'll have to check punctuation and typos though.

Hi Danyelle - This is a very interesting poem with a twist in the tail. LINES 1 & 2. When we are parted from someone we love - by death or distance - we both cry we don't want to but we do. 'I don't want to be cried over - I wish I could be there to make you stop'. LINE 3 & 4 Introduces the idea that YOU are DEAD (I watched you from Heaven) so your 'friend' comits suicide (to be with you) and you are helpless to help. LINE 5 This is very emotive. Your friend dies and you come down form Heaven to take your 'friend' back to heaven with you so you can be together forever. Lovely ending! Love you in poetry - JOHN X