Thursday, January 24, 2008

' He's In My Dream ' Comments

Rating: 3.5

I am covered in heavy cloth
In peace.
I closed my eyes and
Visioned a friend as in
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Riquetta Elliott
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Vipins Puthooran 25 December 2011

Sweet and wonderful poem///

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Fay Slimm 24 February 2009

Very inventive and equally well worded - - a good write and a ten from me -- Fay..

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Catrina Heart 19 February 2009

Beautiful poetic story, you have narrated well...Thanks for the share...10+++

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Hebert Logerie Sr. 07 February 2009

That's a beautiful poem! A nice story, just check your grammar. I love it, don't give up; keep on writing. Great inspiration!

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Riquetta Elliott 06 February 2009

You mean one error :)

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Keith Hendrickson 09 January 2009

very very sweet piece. i liked it

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Ashraful Musaddeq 14 September 2008

A sweet dreamy poem. As if I entered into a dream like this piece!

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Sarwar Chowdhury 14 August 2008

...words successfully captured the dream.....10

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Thompson Oyonmi 22 May 2008

This is a good masterpiece...pretty cool

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Jared Ashby 21 May 2008

i wonder if hope of the future can be enough.

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This poem has such a solid, physical presence as I read it, it stimulates the nerve endings.

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 01 March 2008

wishin ya dreams will come tru!

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Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr 23 February 2008

Commendable work, here, Shia. Creative concept/expression of passion & romance. Mellifluous stanzaec movement, allows for a smooth-fluxed read.Keep that pen of yours pumpin', young lady. ~ FjcR ~

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Fullest possible expression very original. I see soupcon of T.S Elliot in all the spice that this poem is imbued with Shabash [ Urdu for Atta Boy]

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Roger Cornish 20 February 2008

Wonderous stuff Riquetta... I love... 'Something amazed that him and I Was going to make and yes we was Dressed naked.' Truly awesome! Rogerx.

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Thad Wilk 18 February 2008

Very nice poem Riquetta! ! May all your dreams come true! ! ! Best wishes: friend Thad

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Jamie-lee Cuerrier 03 February 2008

'we was' does not make sense in english. I suggest you take an english course for all of your poems are full of grammatical mistakes. Please refrain from 'correcting' other people's work so pretentiously when you yourself do not know what you're doing. Once you fix all of the grammatical mistakes I'm sure your poems will be fine though =)

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John Tiong Chunghoo 26 January 2008

dear riquetta, it is a very naughty poem. it shows your youthfulness. i wish i could have the enthusiasm to wite poems like this in this stage of my life.

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Lawrence S. Pertillar 25 January 2008

The concept and honesty is appreciated in this revealing poem you've written, Riquetta. It's a good poem.

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Alison Cassidy 25 January 2008

This is your best poem yet Riquetta. 'I can see him in the mind of dreams.' is superb poetry. You share your dream with honesty and a unique turn of phrase which is no one else's. You certainly whet this reader's appetite for more. Great work. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Riquetta Elliott

Riquetta Elliott

Baltimore, Maryland
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