I am covered in heavy cloth
In peace.
I closed my eyes and
Visioned a friend as in
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Very inventive and equally well worded - - a good write and a ten from me -- Fay..
Beautiful poetic story, you have narrated well...Thanks for the share...10+++
That's a beautiful poem! A nice story, just check your grammar. I love it, don't give up; keep on writing. Great inspiration!
A sweet dreamy poem. As if I entered into a dream like this piece!
This poem has such a solid, physical presence as I read it, it stimulates the nerve endings.
Commendable work, here, Shia. Creative concept/expression of passion & romance. Mellifluous stanzaec movement, allows for a smooth-fluxed read.Keep that pen of yours pumpin', young lady. ~ FjcR ~
Fullest possible expression very original. I see soupcon of T.S Elliot in all the spice that this poem is imbued with Shabash [ Urdu for Atta Boy]
Wonderous stuff Riquetta... I love... 'Something amazed that him and I Was going to make and yes we was Dressed naked.' Truly awesome! Rogerx.
Very nice poem Riquetta! ! May all your dreams come true! ! ! Best wishes: friend Thad
'we was' does not make sense in english. I suggest you take an english course for all of your poems are full of grammatical mistakes. Please refrain from 'correcting' other people's work so pretentiously when you yourself do not know what you're doing. Once you fix all of the grammatical mistakes I'm sure your poems will be fine though =)
dear riquetta, it is a very naughty poem. it shows your youthfulness. i wish i could have the enthusiasm to wite poems like this in this stage of my life.
The concept and honesty is appreciated in this revealing poem you've written, Riquetta. It's a good poem.
This is your best poem yet Riquetta. 'I can see him in the mind of dreams.' is superb poetry. You share your dream with honesty and a unique turn of phrase which is no one else's. You certainly whet this reader's appetite for more. Great work. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
Sweet and wonderful poem///