Hauntings And Dulcets Comments

there are three things I like about this poem,1) the title suits the mood of the poem very well 2) it feels like painting when I am sad, and 3) its flow is excellent smoothly moving from stanza to stanza. though I personally feel like something remained unsaid here.. very enjoyable.

A great poem.... Very talented. Keep up the great work!

Beautiful, heartfelt poem with amazing lines describing your great angst over betrayal but you realize you can't live without him! ! Excellent write! !

You ask me to check your work because you are kind of new at it and I see that you are good at it and you should keep it up their is nothing you need to change....this is a really good piece

shivering, speechless! ! Good Job! ! ! [3 [3 [3 [3 [3

wow great job! your gifted.

wow great job! your gifted.

you are very talented i loved it

You are only sixteen Tiffany, and you already show a great natural understanding of language, and how to make words paint a picture in the reader's mind. I am fifty eight and I only started writing poetry three years ago, and before that I had never written more than a postcard since leaving school. So young lady you are already showing you have ability, and if you work to develop that ability, you will get better and better, and as you grow older the experience of daily living will help you to gain insight into human behaviour that you currently have not had the time to develop. Keep writing, and reading!

I liked this one. I would shorten the stanzas a bit, both in content per line (i.e. less adjectives and adverbs. Makes it more interesting and reads less like prose) . Also, I would either combine or delet some of the stanzas. Try and say more with less. Thanks, mark Absolve me, my love Pain has conquered me One last defense Against harsh artillery Break away From temporary doom Bid me farewell Destroy this empty tomb

Tiffany, loves hurts! ! ! But each one of each a different way! ! ! ! Beautiful poem! !