Haunted Comments

OOOOHHHHH I like thz one! ! its soo spooky! but reeaally guld. i scorew it a awesome keep writing kind of TEN! ! ! 10++++

Hi Brooke - This is so so exciting! V 1 & 2 The dead of night and a visitation form invisible creatures. V 3 & 4 Their presence is hightened by wind - thunder - lightening - footsteps in the snow and the ubiquitous knock on the door. Excellent structure - excellent content. The tone changes - you begin to question the reality of your experience. The aparition comes and goes 'Then I wake up - and the situation is resolved'. It is your dreams that are haunted - not your life. Glad you escaped the Moonsters Brooke. A lovely story encapsulated in a lovely poem - it deserves a TEN, Love you in Poetry - JOHN.

Krazy twist ending <<<<< u had me like this

Foot steps show in the white snow. nice and interesting surrealistic story poem 10

Thank God, it was just a dream, well-penned poem and a very good start for you, keep it up, you got my well-deserved vote,10+++