Halfalogue Comments

I read the note of Mr. Bri Edwards, No doubt words are background of a poem, but poet-craft to be considered first of all. Usages of words may be faulty, may be unconventional, may be grammatical error there, I think those are of less importance. If a poem is pleasant reading and able to touch heart of the readers, then can be said writing is successful. Your, ''Halfalogue is an example of good piece of writing, pleasant-reading....10 for you.

REGARDING THIS LINE: “Now, my friend, have a hear to my criminality contrary to coy** “ DEFINITION OF “COY” (AN ADJECTIVE) : **coy play adjective \ˈkȯi\ Popularity: Top 20% of words Simple Definition of coy • : having a shy or sweetly innocent quality that is often intended to be attractive or to get attention • : not telling or revealing all the information that could be revealed Source: Merriam-Webster's Learner's Dictionary Examples: coy in a sentence Tip: Synonym guide • • • • • Full Definition of coy 1. 1 a: shrinking from contact or familiarity ['tis but a kiss I beg, Why art thou coy? — William Shakespeare] b: marked by cute, coquettish, or artful playfulness [using coy tricks to attract attention] 2. 2: showing reluctance to make a definite commitment [a coy response] coyly adverb coyness noun ============================================================== I WOULD USE “HAVE A LISTEN” or “LISTEN” instead of “have a hear”. AND BY USING “contrary to coy”, do you mean the speaker will NOT be reluctant to tell all the information about “criminality”? ? ? “campagna”? ? …………. A low flat plain? ? A plain in a park? ? I don’t understand the reference in the poem. “It is oriental hymn I hear at by back to be bold.” ……………..”at by” or “by”? ? and is “back to the bold” the name of a musical group? ? “You are not so right. Breaking the cage-please hold- I want not but cherish to enter into inducing a gate, In God's gifted period I hanker after dateless mate.” …………………. I’m familiar with the words, but don’t understand what you mean when you have linked them all together.*** You have some good rhymes, but I think maybe you “should” concentrate more on “meaning” and less on “rhyming”. I have found this the case with some other poets on PH. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - “But in the sacred wood eke two birds be one and same. “eke 1 Pronunciation: /ēk/ verb [with object] (eke something out) 1Manage to support oneself or make a living with difficulty: they eked out their livelihoods from the soil More example sentences 1.1Make an amount or supply of something last longer by using or consuming it frugally: the remains of yesterday’s stew could be eked out to make another meal More example sentences Synonyms 1.2Obtain or create, but just barely: Tennessee eked out a 74-73 overtime victory I ALSO FOUND “EKE” LISTED AS AN “archaic” adverb defined as “also” ***The first time I read the poem I had the idea that it was possibly about one boy/man being romamtically/sexually attracted to another boy/man. [ I DON’T know how I managed to start using this slanted font! ] I STILL am leaning this way. Or maybe one seeking “just a friend”? “Yessssssssssssssssss, you, my sunny, may blame me, ” …………..”sunny” or “sonny”? ? “No sooner had I gone through bis my self- story strongly built” ……..I’VE NEVER HEARD THE WORD “bis”. Online I found: “bis play adverb \ˈbis\ Popularity: Bottom 30% of words Definition of bis 1. 1: again —used in music as a direction to repeat 2. 2: twice “ 3. ============================================= “Than I felt my faded and fatigued fortitude is fear-filled, ” …………. I like this line; I like alliterations! “When to make a dialogue, As I am still in a Halfalogue.” …………… I like the unique word: “Halfalogue” and that it is also the title. So the speaker is working towards actually talking to the other person? ? Interesting. I must say, I sometimes have a lot of trouble understanding poems by a few poets on PH, even if English is (I think) their “first language”. [Is It Poetry is one such poet] So I’m not sure why I don’t understand more of this poem, although it is NOT ALL cryptic! Bri :)

i have just read this through once. it is a bit difficult for me to react to properly at this time. i shall plan to return to it and read it again before i pass judgement. i'm not sure how much of my lack of understanding is due to language and culture differences, IF ANY. remind me, PLEASE, if i don't respond again to this. i intend to. bri :)