Haikus - Some New Comments

your haiku's r just perfect match with nature..10 up.

Well crafted Good work

I couldn't agree more with Carl Harris. He has expressed exactly what I would say, imagine that as soon as I enterd this page I started counting syllables, and searching for colours and reference to nature! ! ! So I will skip the technical part, and refer only to the meanings you touch and the questions you raise, and I say you are wothy of being called a 'poet'

I liked these four Japanese style poems very much, Sandra, as they were very well expressed, one of the keys to writing in the Japanese forms. Two of them are certainly Haiku poems, the first and last poems. The second and third poems are not Haiku but Senryu poems. I have read and studied Haiku and other Japanese poetic forms for over 30 years, plus have spoken with Japanese and other writers of these forms. For a 5-7-5 syllable poem to be a Haiku, it must speak only of nature, with no references to mankind or anything else other than nature. Any references to mankind or his inventions is considered a Senryu poem in the 5-7-5 syllable format. In the second line of your 4th poem, Profusion is a three syllable word, not a 4 syllable word, so you are one syllable short in line #2 of that poem. you may correct that deficency simply by inserting an 'A' before the word profusion, and you will have the seven syllables you need. As I said, I liked your fine poems, and since there is so much confusion (particularly by American poets) on what is or is not a haiku, wanted to help you understand these forms a little better. The rule for writing these two types of poems is simple: Nature = Haiku; anything else=Senryu. Good luck in the future writing in these forms. Carl.

They are all delightful Sandra and very creative too! I love 'profusion of marigolds' and the moths having to sit up all night to keep out of the storm. Great work! 10 Karin Anderson

Excellent haiku Sandra...you have split haiku of a kind very nicely into senyru and haiku ...Fi 10+++

Beautiful 10++

Very good attempt at 'Haiku of a kind' Sandra - - and I loved the one about the moths...... perhaps it would be better called Senyru... but a super read..... 10 from Fay.

Stock markets bring gains cause tumult in a brain and leaves heart in pain..............................A Good Write............I would call it Senyru......

Very beautiful Sandra. In the first one, (in the first and last lines) the syllabic count went above 5. But never mind......they are all very great.

very close to human experience, esp. the first one...laudable first attempt!

you have beautifully described each subject with finesse. I love it.

Lovely Haikus. The one about the moths is especially appealing. 10, for you. Warm regards, Sandra

chosen words are good..expressive..naizz

Fabulous haikus.....highly inspiring! perfect 10! ! !

good haiku collections...the last two i liked most...10

wonderful haikus...very undestandable, simple and dealing on very practical thoughts.....lovely

Ms. Sandra, Wonderful literary pieces depicting different nuances of life. Congrats. Warm regard.

wonderful haikus written...........10