Haikus - A Small Collection Part B Comments

This is an interesting haiku Herbert. I think that it has to be admired for the dedication to form that is shown, whilst at the same time transporting that form into an area that is not associated with it. This reads as a narrative told in Limerick fashion, obviously not the structure but the narrative is definitely that theme of a Limerick. It flows really well, as it is a very relaxed structure: The wording is not beautiful (as is the norm with Haiku) but the aesthetic of it is humorous, and this, at first reading, seems to suggest a lack of seriousness about the subject. But that is to forget that this is a poem where form and content are inextricably linked. It is as in the field of musical composition (and this has a musicality of its own, a very western one) it is as operetta is to opera, in that the former takes from the later and presents a different type of work. I don't know if that makes sense to you, but that is how I see it. I enjoy this Herbert and you should be congratulated for what you have created. And from the Laureate of the Medical profession as well!

'the dead are sober' what a great line..... like these....