Wednesday, March 2, 2016

Haiku 5 And Haiku 5 Revised (Morning) Comments

Rating: 4.5

sun light filters through
city's high rise building-gloom
a tear in despair!5 7 5
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COMMENTS
Ratnakar Mandlik 23 June 2019

Beautiful flight of imagery that compares filtered sun rise in a high rise with a tear in despair. Thanks for sharing.

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Daniel Brick 10 March 2016

I read Haiku 3,4,5. You fulfill the form with substantive comment, these are resonant poems - and that resonance is what the haiku aims for. You hit the target everytime.

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Savita Tyagi 11 March 2016

Thank you so much for your supportive comment.

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Tirupathi Chandrupatla 02 March 2016

In trying to filter through, the sunlight seems to cut through the buildings. Beautiful presentation.

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Savita Tyagi 03 March 2016

Thank you so much for your comments on my haikus.

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