Haiku 127-(Effort) Comments

I tried to love you, My effort was deep to strain, Trying became chain

Love that suffocates! Marvelous!

being a poet with a classical bent, my first inclination would have been to end with 'Trying was in vain' for my final line. But as I re-read your haiku, I realised that 'Trying became chain' delivered even more punch, as a chain is something unwanted that fetters a person, confining or restraining them. Very effective writing, Prabir!

I tried to love you, My effort was deep to strain, Trying became chain ....