Monday, February 22, 2016

Gypsy Rose Comments

Rating: 4.9

Where do you go to Gypsy Rose,
When you retire to your bed?
Where do you go to Gypsy Rose,
What dreams play inside your head?
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Bri Edwards 06 March 2016

open 'your' arms BUT don't run to the future. not bad advice. unless you want to be a professional running back or soccer forward, or marathoner. i like that you did not force rhymes into each line. when i moved from stanza one to # 2, i wondered if Rose was a sleepwalker. there once was a stripper named Gypsy Rose; same gal? :) bri

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Lyn Paul 05 March 2016

May every Gypsy Rose read these words and see hope.

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Simone Inez Harriman 23 February 2016

A lovely poem Jak. What appears to be so attractive may not be what we wish for...10

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Margaret O Driscoll 23 February 2016

Beautiful poem Jak, yes all that glitters is not gold!

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Edward Kofi Louis 22 February 2016

Perceived perfumery, love is the key; as you are seen everywhere. Nice piece of work.

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