Guns Comments

I agree with Uriah, I rhyme as well, but sometimes it can to much and make a poem sound, well I hate to say it but, kind of cheesy. It's still a good poem though.

I use a little bit of rhyme in my poetry as a guilty pleasure but you have to be careful, you run the two-fold risk of either sounding sing-songy or lessening your meaning but I think for the most part you succeeded.