Sunday, January 6, 2013

Greying Men's Boyhood Dreams Comments

Rating: 3.5

I went down to the local show
Where I could smell the steam
Of antique engines & tractors
And greying men's boyhood dreams.
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Peter Hall
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Ruth Jefferson 01 August 2013

Hey. I just wanted to let you know that I like this poem. I like the way you take something ordinary and everyday and then use it to call forth thought in the reader. Just one thing, I would have liked to see a little more detail because I feel as though I'm taking a journey with you and then there appear to be some places where you jump from one idea to the next. Thank you so much for putting yourself and your writing out here for me to see. Happy writing :)

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