Tuesday, February 2, 2010

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I didn't know you much when i was younger.
But i always had that hunger.
They said that you weren't all there.
That your head was mostly filled with air.
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Miranda Stoltz
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Ravi A 02 February 2010

For the feelings, this is a great poem. The last line is enough. We can forget the rest. Try improvising structurally also. You may do self editing to make it more poetical and resounding. May god bless you.

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