Saturday, March 10, 2018

Grains Of Sand[ 3 Tanka ] Comments

Rating: 5.0

We are grains of sand
In the shoreline of this life
Small fine grains that breath
We live for just a moment
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Nudershada Cabanes
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Dr Dillip K Swain 18 April 2022

New sand grains appear In the shoreline of this life As new life begins....This magnificent poems flies by the wings of hope! A great composition dear poetess! Top score and to my favorite!

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Dr Antony Theodore 10 June 2018

Small fine grains that breath We live for just a moment In the memory of time. do u believe in rebirth.... grain washed away reached the depths of the sea and then reappear on the shores............. is it rebirth or reincarnation? ? thank u dear poetess. tony

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Sylvia Frances Chan 23 April 2018

Mesmerizing Tanka (3) , most beautiful, Nudershada! I am so impressed by your words as: We are grains of sand In the shoreline of this life...Excellent metaphors must I say. I have revisited this poem. Thank you so much for creating. A 10 and much much more!

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Robert Murray Smith 15 April 2018

This poem uses the metaphor of sand to show how we exist.

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Michael Walker 10 April 2018

Bri is right about 'breathe'. Still, three tankas that compare people to grains of sand near the ocean of life. Brilliant extended metaphor.

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Bri Edwards 01 April 2018

(cont.) ..2nd stanza: i think it should say Time washes.... and i also think of waves washing things onto the shore rather than into the ocean, but i'm not sure of all the water-movement technicalities! ! ! ! Gee, i don't know that i'd like going to an abysmal depth. it could be too cold and/or dark for my tastes! :) ok, i guess this is an allegory/metaphor. i like it, taken 'literally' or symbolically. nice. bri :)

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Bri Edwards 01 April 2018

i think a common error: breath (the noun) should be breathe (the verb): i used to make the mistake, but now i think of the 'long E sound' in 'breathe' to remember that it is the word ending in e. breath and breathe are pronounced a bit differently, in case you didn't know or can't tell the difference. i know a Japanese woman who can't tell the difference between some English words which are spelled differently and pronounced differently. (to continue) ...

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Sylvia Frances Chan 22 March 2018

Being aware that we are grains of sand in the shoreline of this life....Amazingly thought, the idea that we live just a moment in the memory of time....WOW! That's truly great and impressing. I love all 3 Tanka, all 3 are as graciously created and thought thoroughly. This is another tender poetic creation of the cycle of life. You are quite a philosopher, Thank you for sharing these mesmerizing Tanka, Nudershada.

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Michael Walker 20 March 2018

A striking opening metaphor-'we are grains of sand'. Then we get swept out into the ocean of sorrow, but get back to the shoreline of hope. Brilliant.

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Paul Brookes 14 March 2018

A beautifully lyric poem of mans insignificance in tide and time great piece thanks

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Chris Embrick 13 March 2018

No matter how beautiful the sand. Time respects everyone equally. When beauty is lost, it is soon replaced. and life goes on. A beautiful poem to ponder. Thank you for a great write.

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Rini Shibu 10 March 2018

Beautiful poem about the new sand which appear in.Life..A thought provoking write

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 10 March 2018

A very imaginative write of great depth. The flow and wording are just fantastic. Beautifully crafted write which captures the essence of life.10

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Bipasha D 10 March 2018

We are grains of sand In the shoreline of this life.... We live for just a moment In the memory of time Truth of life. Loved this, goes into my favorite list of poems.10 +

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