Sunday, November 29, 2009

Good Enough Comments

Rating: 5.0

I guess I should move on,
For it would be right.
I really can't keep these memories.
For they keep me up at night.
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Brooklyn Sorrow
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John Knight 29 November 2009

Hi Brooke - This is really really great - good structure and an element of rhyme which improves the flow and makes it easier to recite. V 1 2 & 3 Are a RESOLUTION 'I guess I should move on - Nothing more than a reminder - My life is good enough' V 4 5 & 6 Are a REBUKE 'Don't say those names - This is mean'. V 7 8 & 9 Ae a RESOLVE 'No more suicide - I'm staying alive for you - That should be good enough'. I'm glad about that Brooke we'd hate to lose you! I score it a TEN. love you in Poetry - JOHN.

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