The whiskey bottles only
sing like a choir when
I've promised myself I
wont drink.
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5. A bit wordy (lots of it could be cut: 'only' in L1, the 'And I think to myself' line, etc.) the images could be more detailed, and some of it is cliched (stanzas 2 and 3) . But a good start.
Good poem, It gets the visual mind going.